Popeman Ideas
I've reached the third act. It all ends now how can i improve the original draft?
1. Explosion
I think if i have an initial explosion they're madness can be 'justified' (at least in they're own heads.). What could lead to an accidental explosion? A homless man peeing outside and effecting the electronics could work.
2. Jesus
He enters under the bridge. Maybe i can have multiple encounters like a video game. He can find power ups/health. I loved this aspect of scott pilgrim it would be fun to integrate something similar into my own story. This also allows me to drag out the end a little longer.
3. John Paul
He fails his fight. Maybe i can have him win, but be jumped by other homeless bums. This way he looks tough and just let his gaurd down too soon, i think this works better for him.
4. Francis
I want him to dress up as 'Choirboy'. He then saves John Paul with his pen. He isn't doing too much at the moment. I want him to be the brains so maybe i can set up more obstacles that he can solve.
5. Final Thoughts
I'm really happy with the progress i'm making with this story. It's a fine balance, but i feel i've managed it well.
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